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Feedback and Dead Sea

Last evening at Cold Wax Academy online course was a lesson on feedback, the importance and effects this has on the artist. One thing that stood out was that sometimes negative observations can be more helpful than positive. We all get into the traps of likes, greats, and loves that we receive on social media, but they give a flash of adrenalin, and it's gone. Really nothing to move forward with. Just last April, when I was at a workshop in Ballycastle, County Mayo, at the Ballinglen Art Foundation, I received a full dose of negative critique/observation. We were all invited to view the online lesson for the Academy in the Museum. The lesson was how we see/read composition. There on the big screen appears one of paintings that I had submitted for the March member critique. Does the painting work? No!

Too much going on. Too many similar shapes, hierarchy problem, area competition, confusing. I felt like I wanted to be swallowed up. I had a negative reaction. Although the examples were anonymous, felt that everyone was staring at me. The next day discussed the painting with Jerry, observing the main issues. Returning home, I decided to work on this painting and others in a series called Sand Sea Salt that I had started prior to the workshop.

Observations and memories of the Dead Sea.


Oils and cold wax on paper

14x14"

March Entry

Oils and Cold Wax on paper

14x14"

Resolved

Added more tonal contrasts, made the upper shape the priority shape and added more eye movement. Comments and constructive criticism are welcome!







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Jun 30, 2023
Rated 5 out of 5 stars.

המעבר מריטריט עמוק של יצירה, במקום חדש עם המון אינטראקציות חדשות, נופים אחרים לימוד וציור שעות ארוכות בחלל משותף--- אל שגרת הבית והיצירה הלבדית, אכן לא פשוט וקל. ובכלל, מעברים הם לא דבר קל. גם בציורים יש תנועה בין משהו סגור ומופנם למקום פתוח רך ואופטימי .

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Lola Jovan
Lola Jovan
Jun 16, 2023

I agree with you about honest, constructive criticism. It is SO helpful! Art can be so subjective, however. Sometimes I know...I just KNOW a piece doesn't work, and yet it gets snapped up by a collector.


Both of your pieces here are compelling - the first piece feels natural, restful, quietly profound. And the resolved piece - intergalactic PUNCH. Both have a mood I enjoy. :)

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carol monosson edan
carol monosson edan
Jun 17, 2023
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Hi guest! Wish I knew who you are! I also liked the calmness of the original, and although I like the new one as well. Think I was over energetic/impulsive, get that way sometimes. Thanks for commenting. Maybe just sign you first name without email address so I know who I am talking to.

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ruth edan
ruth edan
Jun 16, 2023

תמונות מקסימות

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Dotty Seiter
Dotty Seiter
Jun 16, 2023

Carol, this post resonates with me, with its discuss of the value and impact of thoughtful critical feedback, and I want to thank you—again!—for so often providing me with welcome and helpful input regarding the visual language of my work as posted at my blog. The "March Entry" you've posted here immediately grabbed me with it limited palette, muted colors, varied textures, and gently movement. Then I scrolled down … and discovered your resolution of that start! You've opened my eyes here, with your discussion of "too many similar shapes, hierarchy problem, area competition, confusing" in the start and your added tonal contrasts, prioritizing the upper shape, and supplying more eye movement. Your changes are effective and impactful, providing focus,…

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carol monosson edan
carol monosson edan
Jun 17, 2023
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If I correct you are Dotty! Is there something going wrong with the commenting? You are listed as unknown member! Also didn't get a notice that you replied. Never gets boring!

I am happy it resonates with you and always appreciate you in depth observations.

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Guest
Jun 15, 2023

I love the additional contrast from the dark edges. It is still abstract, but more focused. If that makes sense. I love the choppy textures, and the touches of warmth. Made me linger. (Sheila D)

:)

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